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The given pie charts depict the difference in the ways of transport of people who travel to specific university in 2004 and 2009.

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The given pie charts depict the difference in the ways of transport of people who travel to specific university in 2004 and 2009. Overall, it is clearly that two transportations namely bus and car were widely used to travel for the purpose of study. Additonally, after five years, people tended to utilize bus more often to reach the university. In 2004, over half of people decided to travel to one university by car. Following that, the percentage of bus used for travelling accounted for about one third of total methods of transport and only 9% of them prefer to use a bicycle to come to the university, which was three times greater than those who use the train for travelling. By the year 2009, the proportion of bus-based traveller rose to approximate 50% of total. Meanwhile, the ratio of driver decreased by 23% and the percentage of bicycle rider increased by 7%. Other methods of transport such as going by train or walking also followed the upward trend and rose to 4% and 6% in order. .
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pie charts depict the difference in the ways of transport of
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who travel to specific university in 2004 and 2009.
Overall
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bus and car were
widely
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to travel for the purpose of study.
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Additonally
, after five years,
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tended to utilize bus more
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to reach the university.

In 2004, over half of
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people
decided to travel to one university by car. Following that, the percentage of bus
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used
for travelling accounted for about one third of total methods of transport and
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9% of them prefer to
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a bicycle to
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to the university, which was three times greater than those who
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the train for travelling.

By the year 2009, the proportion of bus-based
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traveller
rose to approximate 50% of total. Meanwhile, the ratio of driver decreased by 23% and the percentage of bicycle rider increased by 7%. Other methods of transport such as going by train or walking
also
followed the upward trend and rose to 4% and 6% in order.
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IELTS academic The given pie charts depict the difference in the ways of transport of people who travel to specific university in 2004 and 2009.

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