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Maple High School native speaker percentage

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. The pie charts demonstrate the percentage of students studying at Maple Woods High School who spoke different native languages in the years 2005 and 2010. In 2005, 58% of students were native English speakers, and Spanish speakers constituted a little over 20 per cent. 11% of speakers were Chinese and 10% of students spoke other languages. By 2010, the demographics of the school had slightly changed. In both the years, the largest group of students spoke English as their native language. The percentage of native-English speakers rose steadily from 58% to 63%. Chinese speakers also grew by 4% and accounted for 14% of the population in high school. Meanwhile, the percentage of French speakers reduced considerably from 21% to 13%. Speakers of other languages remained almost the same, growing only by one per cent. Overall, the charts show that the percentage of students who speak English and Chinese are increasing substantially while the percentage of students who speak French is decreasing.
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studying at Maple Woods High School who spoke
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native languages in the years 2005 and 2010.

In 2005, 58% of
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students
were native English speakers, and Spanish speakers constituted a
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over 20 per cent. 11% of speakers were Chinese and 10% of
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students
spoke other languages.

By 2010, the demographics of the school had
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. In both the years, the largest group of
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students
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spoke
English as their native language. The
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percentage
of native-English speakers rose
steadily
from 58% to 63%. Chinese speakers
also
grew by 4% and accounted for 14% of the population in high school. Meanwhile, the
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percentage
of French speakers
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reduced
considerably
from 21% to 13%. Speakers of other languages remained almost the same, growing
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by one per cent.

Overall
, the charts
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show
that the
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percentage
of
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students
who speak English and Chinese are increasing
substantially
while the
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of
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students
who speak French is decreasing.
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IELTS academic Maple High School native speaker percentage

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