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map shows improvement have been made into the student campus during the year 2010 and to the current day

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The map illustrate the development that have been made to the University Campus during the year 2010 to the current day. Overall it is clear from the map that the campus have undergone a lot of changes in the infrastructure. The student housing have undergone major changes. The smaller building of the student accommodation have changed into student facility, shops and offices. Two new accommodation facilities have been constructed one along side the old facility and the other in the place of shop which is moved to the demolished student dormitories. Moreover major changes have been made into the University offices which is now renovated to science building along with the teaching block been changed into the arts building. The lake have also undergone variety of changes like increased grass payment and chairs to sit and relax for the students. The college campus has witnessed tremendous change in structure and after in facilities during the past years.
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illustrate
the development that have
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current
day.

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it is
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clear
from the map that the campus have undergone
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a lot of
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changes
in the infrastructure. The
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student
housing have undergone major
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changes
. The smaller building of the
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student
accommodation have
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changed
into
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student
facility, shops and offices. Two new accommodation facilities have
been constructed
one
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along side
the
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old
facility and the other in the place of shop which is
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moved
to the demolished
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student
dormitories.

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Moreover
major
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changes
have
been made
into the University offices which is
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now
renovated to science building along with the teaching block been
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changed
into the arts building. The lake have
also
undergone variety of
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changes
like increased grass payment and chairs to sit and relax for the students.

The college campus has witnessed tremendous
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change
in structure and after in facilities during the past years.
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IELTS academic map shows improvement have been made into the student campus during the year 2010 and to the current day

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