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The 3 maps compare the layout of west field secondory school from 1950 to 2010. These shows the widely changed construction of buildings. To begin with 1950, main road was at the northern side and it remain there till 2010. However, the modernization was shown in the houses as well as farmland they cover 25% area of north west and south west coast respectively but in 1980 it was demolished and new car parking, science block and sports field were built. Subsequently the school, playground remain at their place there was no changes had seen. With regard to 2010, car parking was enhanced and took the place of southwest side. Whilst the area of sports field shifted towards the eastern part adjacent to playground. From this, kids play ground area was compacted. Overall, there was considerable development in the secondary school area. These changes appear to be instrumental in modernizing.
The 3 maps compare the layout of west field
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shows
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changed
construction of buildings.

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begin
with 1950, main road was at the northern side and it
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remain
there till 2010.
However
, the modernization
was shown
in the
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houses
as well
as farmland they cover 25%
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area
of
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north west
and
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south west
coast
respectively
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but
in 1980 it
was demolished
and new car parking, science block and sports field
were built
.
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Subsequently
the school, playground remain at their place there was no
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changes
had
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seen
. With regard to 2010, car parking
was enhanced
and took the place of southwest side. Whilst the
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area
of sports field shifted towards the eastern part adjacent to playground. From this, kids play ground
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area
was compacted
.

Overall
, there was considerable development in the secondary school
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area
. These
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changes
appear to be instrumental in modernizing.

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