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Map of a City in 1950 , describes changes to a city since 1950

Map of a City in 1950, describes changes to a city since 1950 2RYmA
This diagram illustrate the difference in the city since from 1950 to the current position and the population change 20000 to 200000. Overall, the difference between two diagram is major and the residential area change is drastically over this years. In 1950, the city was near the river and residential area was only on northern side of major road and only one government building on the south side of the river and for crossing the river their was one bridge there. Whereas in the current situation the residential area is now at both side of river and there are new major road which in southern side of river. where in the river there is dam and because of that river width increase and it became lake and now they increase the length of the bridge and also make other bridge in the eastern side of the major road where the Airport situated which is also now more bigger then 1950s Airport. In current situation there are now two Government building one is besides the river and other one is on the southern side of the new major road. The Business district change its length and now its more bigger then before.
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This diagram illustrate
the difference in the city since from 1950 to the
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current
position and the population
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change
20000 to 200000.

Overall
, the difference between two
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diagram
is
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major
and the residential area
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change
is
drastically
over
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this years
.

In 1950, the city was near the
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river
and residential area was
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only
on northern side of
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major
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road
and
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only
one
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government
building on the south side of the
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river
and for crossing the
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river
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their
was one bridge there. Whereas in the
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current
situation the residential area is
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now
at both side of
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river
and there are new
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major
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road
which in southern side of
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river
.
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where
in the
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river
there is dam and
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because
of that
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river
width increase and it became lake and
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now
they increase the length of the bridge and
also
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make
other bridge in the eastern side of the
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major
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road
where the Airport situated which is
also
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now
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more bigger
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then
1950s Airport.

In
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current
situation there are
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now
two
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Government
building one is
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river
and other one is on the southern side of the new
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major
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road
. The Business district
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change
its length and
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now
its
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more bigger
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then
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IELTS academic Map of a City in 1950, describes changes to a city since 1950

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