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With bar and pie charts, there is often a key which tells you what each different bar or area represents. With tables, read the data across the rows and down the columns to identify the key features.

With bar and pie charts, there is often a key which tells you what each different bar or area represents. With tables, read the data across the rows and down the columns to identify the key features. APV8w
A glance at the graph provides information about the tow kinda of programmers watched by Australian citizen among different ages. Looking from all prospectives readily apparent that despite of substantial difference in the percentage of male and female who is watching realistic shows, this percent is fairly equal Between the tow gender in games shows programs. Breaking that down further, it can be seen that vast majority of women tend to watch a realities shows which they constituting of approximately 70%. While male is by far represent merely the half of this percent which is 35%. However, the ratio of reality viewers witnessed an upward trajectory were the percentage of older people(45+) is account for nearly 70%, this percent is merely over 50% for 16-24 age. Moreover, the ratio of game programs watched by men and woman tend to take a different pattern where older people covered the highest figure with about 70% compared to the younger ages(16-24) which comprise merely the half. Whereas the Middle Ages ( 25-44) constitute the least percentage with approximately 40%. It is interesting to note, that older people take the lead in the proportion of programs watching among all ages.
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people
covered the highest figure with about 70% compared to the younger ages(16-24) which comprise
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It is interesting to note, that older
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IELTS academic With bar and pie charts, there is often a key which tells you what each different bar or area represents. With tables, read the data across the rows and down the columns to identify the key features.

Academic
  American English
6 paragraphs
196 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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