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The information presented in the paragraph and the bar chart informs of the number of visitors in millions for three museums per year from 2000 to 2005. Overall, all the museum’s visitor numbers fluctuated except the figures of The National Museum in China were gradually increasing year on year. Turing to the details, The Edo- Tokyo recorded the highest number of visitors in 2000 and 2001, more than thirteen million. After that, the figures decreased about four million in 2002, while it reached the low point, just above six million visitors in 2003. From 2004 to 2005, the museum opened its door for ten and twelve million person respectively. However, there was a significant reduction of about 50% in the number of visitors to The MET exhibition in 2001 and 2002, after it was recorded as the second most popular, twelve million visitors. Moreover, the museum had been visited in 2004 by more than 14 million people, and the numbers raised around two million in the following year. In contrast, The National museum in China, which had the lowest number of visitors in 2000, had a dramatic shoot up in the number of people who visited the museum in 2005, sixteen million person, after it had been steady for two years, 2003 and 2004, at eleven million person per year. In conclusion, despite the visitor numbers in 2002 were less than ten million people in the three museums, The National museum in China managed to increase ticket sales annually to achieve sixteen million visitors in 2005. It appears that China had set a strategic plan and frequent improvements to The National museum every year which played a crucial role in attraction of visitors, and the figures might increasing in the following years, while The MET and Edo-Tokyo visitors may keep fluctuating if the US and Japan not give the museums the priorities.
The information presented in the paragraph and the bar chart informs of the
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number
of
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visitors
in
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millions
for three
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museums
per
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year
from 2000 to 2005.
Overall
, all the
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museum’s
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visitor
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numbers
fluctuated except the figures of The
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National
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Museum
in China were
gradually
increasing
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year
on
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year
. Turing to the
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details
, The
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Edo
- Tokyo recorded the highest
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number
of
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visitors
in 2000 and 2001, more than thirteen
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million
. After that, the figures decreased about four
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million
in 2002, while it reached the low point,
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just
above six
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million
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visitors
in 2003. From 2004 to 2005, the
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museum
opened its door for ten and twelve
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million
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person
respectively
.
However
, there was a significant reduction of about 50% in the
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number
of
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visitors
to The MET exhibition in 2001 and 2002, after it
was recorded
as the second most popular, twelve
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million
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visitors
.
Moreover
, the
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museum
had
been visited
in 2004 by more than 14
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million
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people
, and the
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numbers
raised around two
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million
in the following
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year
.
In contrast
, The
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National
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museum
in China, which had the lowest
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number
of
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visitors
in 2000, had a dramatic shoot up in the
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number
of
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people
who visited the
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museum
in 2005, sixteen
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million
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person
, after it had been steady for two years, 2003 and 2004, at eleven
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million
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person
per
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year
.
In conclusion
, despite the
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visitor
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numbers
in 2002 were less than ten
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million
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people
in the three
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museums
, The
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National
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museum
in China managed to increase ticket sales
annually
to achieve sixteen
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million
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visitors
in 2005.

It appears that China had set a strategic plan and frequent improvements to The
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National
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museum
every
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year
which played a crucial role in attraction of
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visitors
, and the figures might increasing in the following years, while The MET and
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Edo-Tokyo
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visitors
may
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keep
fluctuating if the US and Japan not give the
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museums
the priorities.
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  American English
2 paragraphs
312 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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