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This chart illustrates the registered number of influenza sufferers aging above 65 in a local village in the UK over a period of ten years. Overall, the number of people infected with the flu showed an increase throughout the years. In 1985, 40 people had the fl. This number increased gradually to around 55 cases in 1987. Over the following two years, the number dropped slightly, just before it rose sharply peaking at about 75 infected individuals in 1991. After that, cases dropped to 60 in 1993. The same number was observed in 1995 after having a slight incline to around 60 cases in the year 1994.

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 of influenza sufferers aging above 65 in a local village in the UK over a period of ten years.

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 peaking at about 75 infected individuals in 1991. After that, cases dropped to 60 in 1993. The same You use this word too often, consider replacing it withsumtotalfigurestatistic
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 in 1995 after having a slight incline to around 60 cases in the year 1994. 

IELTS academic line graph influenza cases

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