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Language that 13 years students in one school chose to study

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the line graph gives information about the 13-year-old students selected to study between French and Mandarin languages from 2000 to present in England. overall, it can be concluded that there has been a significant rise in the number of students who has chosen Mandarin language but still French language is more popular than Mandarin language over the period. according to the data, in 2000, only about 7 students choos French language at the same year. from 2000 to 2005, french fell considerably but Mandarin rose sharply dramatically and reached a peak under 80 students. Since 2005, in the both of figures have not changed as much. as we can see, in the next following tear, from 2006 to present, bothe of trends had fluctuated but there was a slight decline in French language, how ever Mandarin has increased in popularity during this time.
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selected to study between French and Mandarin
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languages
from 2000 to present in England.

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overall
, it can
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students
who has chosen Mandarin
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still
French
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language
is more popular than Mandarin
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language
over the period.

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according
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about 7
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students
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French
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at the same year.
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from
2000 to 2005, french fell
considerably
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but
Mandarin rose
sharply
dramatically
and reached a peak under 80
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students
. Since 2005, in the both of figures have not
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changed
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as
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there was a slight decline in French
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IELTS academic Language that 13 years students in one school chose to study

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
143 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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