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international visitors coming to new zealand

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The pie chart illustrates the origin of international visitors who travel to New Zealand. We are able to see the percentages of the countries and the various percentages are shown by the different largeness. First of all, as we see, the most popular and the biggest part of this pie chart which is equals to nearly half of the visitors is Australia. With another words, almost one of the each two of visitors are from Australia. It refers to 40% in this chart. On another hand the least visitors come from South Korea that is shown by 3%. Additionally, The East Asia countries mentioned here which are South Korea, Japan and China are equals to 12% by gathering 3%, 4% and 5%. Also, the countries which are common with talking English are United Kingdom and United States are the second and third by order with 12% and 9%. In addition to all, except the countries we mentioned above are indicated with “other” and this group takes up place approximately 3 over 10.

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visitors
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see
 the percentages of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 and the various percentages are shown
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different
 largeness.

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see
, the most popular and the biggest part of this pie chart which is equals to nearly
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visitors
 is Australia. With Did you mean "in other words"?in other words
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the each
 two of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompanycallerforeignerguest
visitors
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 from Australia. It refers to 40% in this chart. On another hand the least You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompanycallerforeignerguest
visitors
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come
 from South Korea that is shown
 by 3%.

Additionally
, The East Asia You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 mentioned here which are South Korea, Japan and China are equals to 12% by gathering 3%, 4% and 5%. Also
, the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 which are common with talking English are United
 Kingdom and United States are the second and third by order with 12% and 9%.

In addition
 to all, except the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 we mentioned above are indicated
 with “other” and this group takes up place approximately 3 over 10. 