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Information of Dubai gold sales

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The diagram illustrates how much gold was sold in Dubai over a period of 12 months. Overall, gold sales in Dubai remained relatively unchanged at the end of 2002 despite violent fluctuations throughout the year. Besides, they were at their highest in March while the weakest sales figures could be observed in July and September. In the first month of 2002, they stood at 200 million dirhams and rose slightly to reach about 225 million in February. This was followed by another increase, although much steeper, in March when sales were almost 125 million dirhams higher than in February. However, this upward trend was suddenly broken and sales plummeted dramatically over the next 4 months to reach a little over 100 million dirhams in July. August sales saw a significant rise back to January levels as figures nearly doubled, but they dropped again in September to the same level as they were in July. There was a small increase of about 100 million dirhams in October, after which the figure levelled off and remained relatively static over the last two months of 2002.
The diagram illustrates how much gold
was sold
in Dubai
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over
a period of 12 months.

Overall
, gold
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sales
in Dubai remained
relatively
unchanged at the
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end
of 2002 despite violent fluctuations throughout the year.
Besides
, they were at their highest in March while the weakest
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sales
figures could
be observed
in July and September.

In the
first
month of 2002, they stood at 200
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dirhams
and rose
slightly
to reach about 225
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million
in February. This
was followed
by another increase, although much steeper, in March when
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sales
were almost 125
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million
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dirhams
higher than in February.
However
, this upward trend was
suddenly
broken and
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sales
plummeted
dramatically
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over
the
next
4 months to reach a
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little
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over
100
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million
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dirhams
in July. August
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sales
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saw
a significant rise back to January levels as figures
nearly
doubled,
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but
they dropped again in September to the same level as they were in July. There was a
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increase of about 100
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million
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dirhams
in October, after which the figure levelled off and remained
relatively
static
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over
the last two months of 2002.
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