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In the present age, having accommodation has become a standard demand for people’s lives.

In the present age, having accommodation has become a standard demand for people’s lives. 2KmLx

In the present age, having accommodation has become a standard demand for people’s lives. It is argued that owning a home is more important for people than renting one. In my opinion, I believe that having a home is a natural human desire but it contains risks. On the one hand, there are various compelling reasons why people in modern-day are likely to own a home. Firstly, in some countries, a house is an essential factor to build a family. Once a family owns their own home, their family will have a steady flatform for their life and they are able to follow their purpose without the fear of being homeless. Secondly, another reason is that the cost of accommodation increases over time. If they do not buy a house soon, they may rent for a whole life because of the massive price increase of the rental properties. In some cities, almost all residents are tenants and they can not afford a private house. Nonetheless, home ownership is a negative trend as it forces unrealistic expectations on millions. Most people live in city apartments with rents and are not capable of buying a house. The pressure to buy one is likely to engender feelings of inadequacy and resentment towards the upper classes. Moreover, due to this pressure, wealthy people tend to buy more houses and lead to the growth of real estate. In recent years, citizens having medium income not only can not buy a home but are also facing higher rental payments. As a result, they save more money for purchasing a house and do not invest for their quality of life. In conclusion, owning a home is innately desirable but in the end causes more harm than good due to the pressure it places on individuals. Many people have learned this lesson and home ownership may begin to decline in the future.

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