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IN THE MODERN WORLD, IT IS NO LONGER NECESSARY TO USE ANIMALS AS FOOD OR OTHER PRODUCTS, SUCH AS MEDICINES AND CLOTHING . DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE

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It is a common belief that products such as food, medicine or clothing made by animals are essential. However, nowadays, materials taken from animals are not necessary because there are a lot of alternative sources. From my perspective, I totally agree with this idea and will discuss several compelling reasons in this essay. On the one hand, it is proven that people are threatened by heart attack, cardiovascular disease and other health problems. According to these symptoms, there are a wide range of factors affecting our health but the most dangerous in one of them are from animals. For instance, when people eat beef for a long time in their meal, they get high cholesterol in their body which gives rise to heart disease. In spite of eating food rich of protein, we should balance our meal with variety of foods such as vegetables, fruits Additionally, clothes making from animals’ fur take the designers many time to complete the products because it will get through many diverse process to have accomplished products. Meanwhile, animals’ fur or skin can be replaced by different textures with lower cost of production. Moreover, research shows that medicines from herbal or plants get the outstanding breakthrough in helping people cure their sickness. Because of that, animal usage is gradually no longer indeed. In conclusion, while I agree that products made from animals bring us various of benefits but instead of using animals, there are still have some alternative materials which get a good impact on environment and for people health

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