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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them? KX2R

Goods is distributed from factory to shops and households using different modes of transport. This graph compares four types of transport used to distribute goods between 1974 and 2002 in UK. Modes of transport included in this graph is road, water, rail and pipeline. In general, quantity of good distributed using road, water and pipeline is slightly increasing from 1974 to 2002, except for rail which slightly decreasing until around 1995 and increasing again afterwards. In comparison, road is the most used while pipeline is the least used to transport goods between those years. In 1974 to 1978, water and rail are used in the same quantity relatively. However, a significant difference is seen from 1978 afterwards where water transport is used more often and rail is used less often. Although, there are an increasing quantity of good transported using water transportation, the road is still the most used transportation used to distribute good in UK throughout 1974 to 2002. Same goes on pipeline, it is still the least used transportation to distribute goods even though rail lowers in quantity. Nonetheless, in the last 4 years, we can see that road is somewhat stagnant while water is rocketing. In the next few years, if this trend is sustained, water transport may pass the road transport as the most utilized transport to distribute goods in the UK. Furthermore, rail shows an increasing as well in the last 4 years even though not as sharp as water transport. Meanwhile other transport is used more in the last 4 years, pipeline is in plateau since 1994 and it may retain in the next few years. Through this graph, we can see how modes of transport used in the UK to transport goods change over time. The preference is not very dynamic even though some modes of transport increased especially in the latter years. Road and pipeline remains the most and the least used modes of transport to distribute good in the UK, respectively In this era of automation, everything is getting efficient and faster, including how food is prepared and how we get it. Although it is very convenient to grab your burger only by driving through a restaurant, it surprisingly has negative effects on our health, especially related to obesity. Not only what kind of foods that causing this but also how we get it. This is only a few examples of health problems we faced today. In this essay, we will discuss more in-depth the causes of increasing average weight as well as its correlation to decreasing fitness in people nowadays. If we look these problems geographically, it is not distributed equally over the world. These problems, mostly, found in developed countries such as in the North America and Europe. In contrast, countries in Africa and Middle East, such as Yemen, is facing issue of famine. However, this contrary situation gives us easier comparisons to understand overweight problem. In develop countries, people are busy in front of their desk throughout the day with only slight body movement, while in Africa, especially tribal, people are very active doing jobs involving sufficient body movement. Another difference are people in developed countries are easily getting their three meals a day while food source in Africa is extremely limited, thus it makes people in Africa is more active than people in developed countries to find foods. Moreover, high calories processed food with unhealthy ingredients is much more easily encountered in developed countries. These foods contribute to overweight due to excessive calories it contains than a recommended personal intake. Although the serving recommendation available in the groceries label, people do not read it most of the times. Therefore, active intervention from government should be applied such as higher food tax for high calories unhealthy foods to lessen the consumption of it. While average weight of people in some countries is increasing and levels of fitness is decreasing, it does not apply to every country. The problems we encounter related to obesity came from our unhealthy lifestyles especially little physical activity and consumption of excessive calories.

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