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•Write about the following topic: •In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. •Do you think this is a good idea? •Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

•: •In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. •Do you think this is a good idea? •Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience Ewmyq
These days, more and more young people in countries around the world have part-time jobs while they are still students. But is that a good idea in today's society? Some people believe that it is good for students because they can earn their own money to meet their own financial needs as well as reduce the cost burden for their parents. I completely disagree with this idea, and in this essay I will support my opinion with examples.
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IELTS academic •: •In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. •Do you think this is a good idea? •Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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