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In today’s era many image makers are turning their way to beauty and filling their accounts with currency notes instead of successful accomplishments. As a result, it will create a bad image to young people. Yes, I agree with the statement because in the society celebrities are leading their lives with luxurious life style and posh culture. The essay will will elaborate below. Firstly, in the society image setters are consider as role model mostly by young people but in current generation celebrities follow modern life style in the society that includes with many bad cultural eves especially partying night times in clubs and playing cards by promoting betting culture. This will ultimately create a destroyable thoughts in the minds of young people as they follow celebrities. For instance, recently one of the famous actor in Mumbai was caught by NCB officers under narcotic drug consumption. Secondly, as a book has chapters to turn over for more info similarly celebrities do have other lifestyle habits majorly consumption of alcohol and drugs at cruise parties. Moreover advertising to some brand products on fairness, energy drinks are all creating negative impact on young people since these practices are never going to be showcase high trend outcome as a result. For example, a famous south Indian film start advertise to body spray perhaps on knowing that use of body sprays leads to skin related problems medically. In conclusion, young people should not follow footprints or lifestyle of celebrities blindly without knowing differences instead, one can follow celebrities who are originally doing some thing great to the society.
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today
’s era
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many
image makers are turning their way to beauty and filling their accounts with currency notes
instead
of successful accomplishments.
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, it will create a
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bad
image to
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young
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people
. Yes, I
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agree
with the statement
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because
in the
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society
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celebrities
are leading their
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lives
with luxurious life style and posh culture. The essay
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will will
elaborate below.

Firstly
, in the
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society
image setters are
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consider
as role model
mostly
by
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young
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people
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but
in
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current
generation
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celebrities
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follow
modern life style in the
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society
that includes with
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many
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bad
cultural eves
especially
partying
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night times
in clubs and playing cards by promoting betting culture. This will
ultimately
create a
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destroyable
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thoughts
in the minds of
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young
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people
as they
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follow
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celebrities
.
For instance
, recently one of the
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famous
actor in Mumbai
was caught
by NCB officers under narcotic drug consumption.

Secondly
, as a book has chapters to turn over for more info
similarly
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celebrities
do have other lifestyle habits
majorly
consumption of alcohol and drugs at cruise parties.
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Moreover
advertising to
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some
brand products on fairness, energy drinks are all creating
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negative
impact on
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young
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people
since these practices are never going to be showcase high trend outcome
as a result
.
For example
, a
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famous
south Indian film
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start
advertise to body spray perhaps on knowing that
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use
of body sprays leads to skin related problems
medically
.

In conclusion
,
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young
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people
should not
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follow
footprints or lifestyle of
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celebrities
blindly
without knowing differences
instead
, one can
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follow
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celebrities
who are
originally
doing
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some thing
great to the
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society
.
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