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In many countries it is common for parents to give their children pocket money to you do the advantage outweigh the disadvantages

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Money matters a lot in everyone's life it is certainly true that in many countries children have more items and their parents give them pocket money there are certain drawbacks of this friend I believe that on the whole merits outweigh demerits. In the forthcoming paragraphs I will are articulate both advantages as well as disadvantages. On the one hand, there are many demerits of giving pocket money to children by parents. To begin with, the main problem is that the children are not mature enough to decide their wrong and right. they can misuse their money. For example, they might be trying drugs or smoking under peer pressure. In addition, nowadays parents have no enough time to select things for their pupils. Egro, they give bucks to their children. As a result, the youngsters think that their parents have no interest in them and then they can use their money in any way they can waste their bucks on buying unnecessary things. However, In my opunion, I would argue that these drawbacks outweighed by the benefits of providing pocket money. Firstly, pocket money improves decision making. In other words. l, children learn the way of standing they become know about cost of different things and also know the way of managing money what is more they can learn additional skills by joining extra classes they can learn the skill of saving money can manage money according to their expenditures become self Independence for the more one can explore more in his studies can buy more informative books and improve his knowledge as a result pocket money help us in many ways but it is prominent that whether you know the right way of using it or not. Summing up it seems to me that there are lots of benefits of pocket money and they are more significant than drawbacks of providing pocket money.
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as well as
disadvantages. On the one hand, there are
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them and
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learn the way of standing they become know about cost of
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by joining extra classes they can learn the
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of saving
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can manage
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according to their expenditures become self Independence for the more one can explore more in his studies can
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more informative books and
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IELTS academic In many countries it is common for parents to give their children pocket money to you do the advantage outweigh the disadvantages

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