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EVERYONE SHOULD STAY AT SCHOOL UNTIL 18. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

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There have been many controversial arguments surrounding students should compulsorily complete their education program until they become adults. While there are some advocates of people do not have to study until 18, in my opinion, I strongly believe that it is better to stay in the academic environment because of many reasons that I will discuss in the essay. To begin with, by studying at high school, students gain a wealth of knowledge and skills that they can use and apply to higher-level qualifications. For example, students learn MOS- Microsoft Office Specialist in Information Technology classes, and when they graduate they can get the certification of basic technology of Microsoft. Moreover, in Literature lessons, the teachers teach pupils about the people, countries where they are living, this may lead to many students becoming good citizens in society. Besides, there is a lot of knowledge of how to write paragraphs or essays. It is crucial for the future when students want to get a job and have to write a Curriculum Vitae. Additionally, the people who are under 18, are too young and do not have a lot of daily experiences. At this age, they need to educate carefully because of the high risk of becoming bad people in the future. For instance, if they do not have education in a good way, they will catch lots of social evil, such as alcoholism, violence and so on. Despite some of the given counterarguments, I personally still strongly believe that students should stay at school until they become adults.
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study until 18, in my opinion, I
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reasons that I will discuss in the essay.

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students
gain a wealth of knowledge and
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skills
that they can
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use
and apply to higher-level qualifications.
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,
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students
learn MOS- Microsoft Office Specialist in Information Technology classes, and when they graduate they can
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get
the certification of basic technology of Microsoft.
Moreover
, in Literature lessons, the teachers teach pupils about the
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people
, countries where they are living, this may lead to
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students
becoming
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way, they will catch lots of social evil, such as alcoholism, violence and
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IELTS academic EVERYONE SHOULD STAY AT SCHOOL UNTIL 18.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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