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In June 1996, an experimental flu vaccine was trialled in a large country town on females only. The result of this survey is presented in the following illustration.

The line graph and bar graph reveal the number of cases and deaths due to flu and pie chart demonstrates the percentage of experiment of vaccine. Overall, amount of females was maximum in cases rate and deaths, while recipients of new vaccine groups who at the risk thst was aged group. In june 1996, number of deaths and fle rate highest in females that was one in march to may and from june to august that was rose with five but flu rate of cases was showed fluctuations from zero to 2500, while men also followed erratical trend in number of cases which was 0 to 1500. Moreover, number of deaths of males due to flu was 0 in march to may but in june to august it was rose with 4. The percentage of babies who tried new vaccine at risk that was 24% and 35% aged group over 65 years old. At last, 13% vaccine experiment on hospitalised and 28% not given the vaccine respectively in june 1996.
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of cases and deaths due to flu and pie chart demonstrates the percentage of experiment of vaccine.

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groups who at the
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of deaths and
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of deaths of males due to flu was 0 in
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it was rose with 4.

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that was 24% and 35% aged group over 65 years
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IELTS academic In June 1996, an experimental flu vaccine was trialled in a large country town on females only. The result of this survey is presented in the following illustration.

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