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The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two bar graph illustrates and compares the percentage of men and women employment rate in Canada, South Korea, and Sweden in 2005 and 2015. In 2015 the employment rate of men is gradually increased, whereas Canada has 60% of men employed and more than 75% in South Korea and Sweden. But women employed rates are less than 50% in all three countries. Overall the male employment rates are higher than female employment rates in 2005. After a decade, the overall boy's employment percentages are improved by 10%. South Korea has 88% of male workers and 70% of male workers in Canada and Sweden. the lowest percentage of female workers wound in South Korea with 35% in 2015. 55% and 50% of women workers in Canada and Sweden respectively. In conclusion, overall the male worker's percentage is more than the female worker's percentage in all three countries. In 2005 the number of female workers in Canada is 38% but it reaches 70% after 10 years.
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IELTS academic The bar charts below show the percentages of men and women in employment in three countries in 2005 and 2015.

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