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If I was on a desert island, I would find drinkable water and food in light of the fact that the most essential thing is surviving until rescued. In that case, my priority is finding a source of clean drinkable water because the body can not live without liquids for more than 4 days. If there was no fresh water, I may catch any rainwater to drink. Subsequently, I would catch fish by creating a long spear from one of the branches I found on the island. Finally, being lost on a remote island is literally terrible on the contrary I would try my best to be calm due to the fact of being nervous doesn’t help anything, I would set my mind at rest. In conclusion, If I was lost on aunknown island, I would doeverything to survive and keep calm to wait for rescue.
If I was on a desert
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, I would find drinkable water and food in light of the fact that the most essential thing is surviving until rescued.
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, my priority is finding a source of clean drinkable water
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the body can not
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without liquids for more than 4 days. If there was no fresh water, I may catch any rainwater to drink.
Subsequently
, I would catch fish by creating a long spear from one of the branches I found on the
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island
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Finally
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being lost
on a remote
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on the contrary
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anything, I would set my mind at rest.
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IELTS academic imagine being lost on remote island

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