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The line graph compares monthly spending by citizens Miami, New York, Portland and Los Angeles on technology in a period of six months, from January to Jun. It is clear that Portland store’s sales had a growth but still be at last position, while purchasing number in NY and Miami nearly stabilized during the period, while LA experienced a slightly decreased. From Jan to feb, la and Portland store both had a sharp reduction by 50 products, to 145 and 50 in turn. After that, the selling rate in LA continued to went down marginally over the next 3 months, from 145 to 130, then slightly increased to 140 in Jun. In contrast, Miami store saw a climb to 80 after hitting the low, and gradually grew to 120 in 3 following months. The Miamian paid out of tech exp an upward trend in the first 4 month, then drop to 140 at last. On the other hand, sales in ny store fell by 10 in 3 months, frm jan to apr, then increased and became the leader store of jun, recorded 180 items sold.
The line graph compares monthly spending by citizens Miami, New York, Portland and Los Angeles on technology in a period of six
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, from January to Jun.

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that Portland
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store’s
sales had a growth
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but
still
be at last position, while purchasing number in NY and Miami
nearly
stabilized during the period, while LA experienced a
slightly
decreased.

From Jan to
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, la and Portland
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store
both had a sharp reduction by 50 products, to 145 and 50 in turn. After that, the selling rate in LA continued to went down
marginally
over the
next
3
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months
, from 145 to 130, then
slightly
increased to 140 in Jun.
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, Miami
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store
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a climb to 80 after hitting the low, and
gradually
grew to 120 in 3 following months.

The
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Miamian
paid out of tech exp an upward trend in the
first
4
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, then drop to 140 at last.
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, sales in
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ny
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fell by 10 in 3
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,
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to
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, then increased and became the leader
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of jun, recorded 180 items sold.

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6.0
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