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IELTS Writing Task 1, diagram, building a tepee

IELTS Writing Task 1, diagram, building a tepee G9abQ
The diagram shows the eight most important stages in constructing a tent called tepee. The process begins with using a rope to tie three sticks together and finishes with fixing the canvas to the ground. Firstly, use a rope to fasten three sticks together, then raise the sticks by pulling the end of the rope to form a tripod. Next, attache more sticks to the tripod to build a stable form. To ensure the tepee’s stability, wrap the end of the rope around all the sticks. In the fifth stage of the process, the stick is lifted against the tripod and the canvas is unwrapped onto the tepee. Following this, the canvas is wrapped around another sticks. In the next stage, metal pins are used to pin the end of the canvas together. Finally, the bottom of the canvas is fixed to the ground. Now the tepee is built.
The diagram
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shows
the eight most
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important
stages in constructing a tent called
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tepee
. The process
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begins
with using a
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rope
to tie three
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sticks
together and finishes with fixing the
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canvas
to the ground.

Firstly
,
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use
a
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rope
to fasten three
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sticks
together, then raise the
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sticks
by pulling the
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end
of the
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rope
to form a tripod.
Next
,
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attache
more
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sticks
to the tripod to build a stable form. To ensure the
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tepee’s
stability, wrap the
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end
of the
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rope
around all the sticks.

In the fifth stage of the process, the
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stick
is lifted
against the tripod and the
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canvas
is unwrapped
onto the
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tepee
. Following this, the
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canvas
is wrapped
around another
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sticks
. In the
next
stage, metal pins are
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used
to pin the
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end
of the
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canvas
together.
Finally
, the bottom of the
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canvas
is
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fixed
to the ground.
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Now
the
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tepee
is built
.
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IELTS academic IELTS Writing Task 1, diagram, building a tepee

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
149 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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