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some people believe that the increasing popularity of shopping as a leisure activity is a positive trend others believe that it is harmful to individuals. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

some people believe that the increasing popularity of shopping as a leisure activity is a positive trend others believe that it is harmful to individuals. Nl0Xy
These days more and more people are spending leisure time by shopping. But what is the most effective method of dealing with the utilisations of free time? some people believe that spending ti me in going supermarket in free tie is not good things. in this essay i will discuss both sides of argument and draw conclusion. it is certainly true that people of cities are suffering from hectic life style as there is no public open space for refreshment. That's why spending weekend in shopping center becomes first choice with their children doing some sort of shopping, playing indoor games and watching movies. For example during public holidays there is bustling in shopping complexes. if this trends of using free time as shopping time goes on then it will increase the viability of city and ultimately it will boom economy of nation. on the flipside, spending free time in shopping will not make people really happy for long time. buying material more than needed will not appropriate it is just waste of money on unproductive things. this leisure time can be used as family time which will help to cultivate culture of reading extra books discussion on current issue, going out for hiking and cycling will refresh our body and mind. for instance children of active family seems more creative and developing good life skill. As result children and parents will have strong bonding rather than spending money on unproductive things. In conclusion i believe that family events outing will help children to live happy and healthy life rather than just enjoying in between boundary wall with material.
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of cities are suffering from hectic life style as there is no public open space for refreshment. That's why
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spending
weekend in
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center becomes
first
choice with their
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children
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, playing indoor games and watching movies.
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during public holidays there is bustling in
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shopping
complexes.
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if
this trends of using
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goes on then it will increase the viability of city and
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it will boom economy of nation.

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the
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buying
material more than needed will not appropriate it is
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waste of money on unproductive things.
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of active family seems more creative and developing
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life
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. As result
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and parents will have strong bonding
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money on unproductive things.

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believe that family
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IELTS academic some people believe that the increasing popularity of shopping as a leisure activity is a positive trend others believe that it is harmful to individuals.

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269 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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