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The given bar charts depict the amount of ownerships of computer amongst the people in between 2002 and 2010, in addition with individual education level for the same time period. Overall, there is an increasing trend seen inside both the illustrations, the usage of computers gradually move upwards by the years and also, as the level of education goes higher, so is the purchase of computers. Firstly in the year 2002, the computer inside the households stays below sixty percent mark which slightly increased in the following years till 2010 by crossing the level of seventy percent. Now on comparing the usage on the terms of education, it remains below the point of forty percent till 2006, where it overshoots the level of eighty percent and proves that the computers dependent education was less till 2006. On the other hand, the gap between the study based computer usage is wide till 2008 where people with high school diploma, graduates and incomplete college goers overshoots the demand by approximately thirty percent. As the 2009 and 2010 comes, this difference approaches to almost ten percent but with all time high numbers showing the computers are covering major part of the educated society.
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bar charts depict the amount of
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ownerships
of computer amongst the
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people
in between 2002 and 2010,
in addition
with individual
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education
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level
for the same time period.

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, there is an increasing trend
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seen
inside both the illustrations, the usage of computers
gradually
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move
upwards by the years and
also
, as the
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level
of
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education
goes higher,
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so
is the
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purchase
of computers.

Firstly
in the year 2002, the computer inside the households stays below sixty
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percent
mark which
slightly
increased in the following years till 2010 by crossing the
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level
of seventy
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percent
.
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Now
on comparing the usage on the terms of
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education
, it remains below the point of forty
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percent
till 2006, where it overshoots the
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level
of eighty
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percent
and proves that the computers dependent
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education
was less till 2006.

On the other hand
, the gap between the study based computer usage is wide till 2008 where
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people
with high school diploma,
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graduates
and incomplete college goers overshoots the demand by approximately thirty
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percent
. As the 2009 and 2010
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comes
, this difference approaches to almost ten
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percent
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but
with
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all time
high numbers showing the computers are covering major part of the educated society.
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IELTS academic Hello, I am Ramandeep. I called you today for IELTS writing and speaking evaluation.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
200 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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