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he graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

he graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. MMMeL
The graph displays the proportion of the elderly, from 65 years old and over in the middle of a century in three independent nations. The most noticeable progressions are the one from Japan and the USA, for Japan, their elder community was the lowest, while in the USA they were the higher proportion, but it’s expected that for 2040, Japan will have the highest percentage and the USA the lowest. Firstly, in 1940 in the USA 9% of their population was 65 years old and over, this percentage slightly climbed until 1960, then it sky-rocketed until 1980. In 1980. It began to decrease. In 2020 it started to increase again and it’s predicted that it will continue increasing. On the other hand, the Swedish elder population began at 7%, but increase almost all of the time between 1940 and 2040. Their elderly population percentage decline modestly between 1980 and 1990, and also started decreasing in 1990 and it’s anticipated to continue decreasing until 2025, but then the number of elder population should sky-rocket. Japan began with only 5% of people aged 65 and over, but it’s predicted to be the highest percentage between the three countries in 2040. Their representation in the chart shows a regular decreasing with slight climbs, but from 1985 is started climbing proportionally, increasing every period a little bit more, and supposedly sky-rocketing in 2030. In conclusion, Sweden will keep being the country in the middle of the percentage with a continuous climb, while the USA and Japan will switch places. Japan will have a drastic change and the USA will decrease eventually but will recover.
The graph displays the proportion of the elderly, from 65 years
old
and over in the middle of a century in three independent nations. The most noticeable progressions are the one from
Japan
and the USA, for
Japan
, their elder community was the lowest, while in the USA they were the higher proportion,
but
it’s
expected
that for 2040,
Japan
will have the highest
percentage
and the USA the lowest.

Firstly
, in 1940 in the USA 9% of their
population
was 65 years
old
and over, this
percentage
slightly
climbed until 1960, then it sky-rocketed until 1980. In 1980. It began to decrease. In
2020 it
started
to increase again and it’s predicted that it will continue increasing.

On the other hand
, the Swedish elder
population
began at 7%,
but
increase almost
all of the
time between 1940 and 2040. Their elderly
population
percentage
decline
modestly
between 1980 and 1990, and
also
started
decreasing in 1990 and it’s anticipated to continue decreasing until 2025,
but
then the number of elder
population
should sky-rocket.

Japan began with
only
5% of
people
aged 65 and over,
but
it’s predicted to be the highest
percentage
between the three countries in 2040. Their representation in the chart
shows
a regular decreasing with slight climbs,
but
from 1985 is
started
climbing
proportionally
, increasing every period a
little bit
more, and
supposedly
sky-rocketing in 2030.

In conclusion
, Sweden will
keep
being the country in the middle of the
percentage
with a continuous climb, while the USA and
Japan
will switch places.
Japan
will have a drastic
change
and the USA will decrease
eventually
but
will recover.
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