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he following bar graph compares the age profiles of male and female cinema goers in the year 2012.

he following bar graph compares the age profiles of male and female cinema goers in the year 2012. 8dNLm
The bar chart commensurates the age porfiles of gents and ladies cinema goers in the year 2012. Overall, the histogram is subdivided in to five age groups with the average number of visits in percentage per year. Based on the graph the age group above 50 had highest number of frequency of visits as compared to the other age groups. In the bar graph, the adult group of both men and women visitied equal percentage in movie theater that was 7%. Similarly, it can be seen that the age group of 35-49 years also visited same average percent a year that was 25%. After analyzing, the men's average visits were higher than ladies movie theater visit in both the age groups 18-24 years and 25-34 years. In contrast, the average number of the visits of the men had lesser than women of the age group of 50 and over. After peruse the average number of the men visits to the movie theater were equal to the average number of visits of women to the theater.
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2012.

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, the histogram
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age
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with the
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average
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visits
in percentage per
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year
. Based on the graph the
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age
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group
above 50 had
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highest
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number
of frequency of
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visits
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age
groups.

In the bar graph, the adult
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group
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men
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visitied
equal percentage in movie
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theater
that was 7%.
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that the
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age
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of 35-49 years
also
visited same
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average
percent a
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year
that was 25%.

After analyzing, the
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men
's
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average
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visits
were higher than ladies movie
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theater
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visit
in both the
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age
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groups
18-24 years and 25-34 years.
In contrast
, the
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number
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visits
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men
had lesser than women of the
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of 50 and over.
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visits
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theater
were equal to the
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IELTS academic he following bar graph compares the age profiles of male and female cinema goers in the year 2012.

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