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IN MANY COUNTRIES, WOMEN JOIN THE ARMY AS MEN DO. HOWEVER, SOME PEOPLE ARHUE THAT ARMY SOLELY NEEDS MEN WHAT IS YOUR OPINION.

IN MANY COUNTRIES, WOMEN JOIN THE ARMY AS MEN DO. HOWEVER, SOME PEOPLE ARHUE THAT ARMY SOLELY NEEDS MEN WHAT IS YOUR OPINION. G96L2
WOMEN EMPOWERMENT IS A MAJOR REVOLUTION AS WELL AS WOMEN HAVE PROVED THEIR CAPABILITY IN MANY FIELDS. IN SEVERAL NATION WOMEN ARE RECRUITING AS A ARMY OFFICER SIMILAR TO MEN AND ACCORDING TO SOME PEOPLE THE ARMY WING SHOULD BE ONLY DOMINATED BY MEN. SUCH OPINIONS SHOULD BE ALTERED AND PERSECUTE GENDER INEQUALITY TO OVERCOM THIS RUDIMENTORY THINKING. WOMEN ARE BEING SUCCESSFULL DAY BY DAY AND THEY ARE HAVE PROVEN THAT THEY ARE NOT ONLY EQUAL TO MEN BUT THEY ARE SUPERIOR. FEMALES CAN BARE MORE PAIN AS COMPARED TO MALES AND ALSO THEY ARE PHYSICALLY AND EMOTIONALLY MORE STABLE AS COMPARED TO THE MALE. THESE GENRE OF SKILLS ARE MUST IN BEING AN ARMY OFFICER WHICH SHOWS THAT THEY CAN ALSO DO JOB AS A SOLDIER AND CAN BEAT THE MALES IN TERMS OF SOCIAL AND PHYSICAL SKILLS. FOR INSTANCE, LAST YEAR A A LADY ARMY OFFICER PERFORMED A PARADE ON INDEPENDANCE DAY AND WHOLE AUDIANCE INCLUDING POLITICAL LEADERS APPLAUDE FOR HER. MOREOVER SOME PEOPLE COUNTER THAT SOLDIER'S WING SHOULD ONLY BE DOMINATED BY MALE FIGURES ONLY, IN MY OPINION IT IS GENDER INEUALITY BECAUSE JUST ON THE BASIS ON GENDER WE CANNOT JUDGE ANYONE NOT THEIR SKILLS NOT THEIR CAPABILITY NOTHING. WE SHOULD GIVE WOMEN A CHANCE TO COMBAT WHILE HAVING A WAR I STRONGLY BELIEVE THAT WOMEN WILL SHOW GREAT POWER, STRENGTH AS WELL AS ABILITY TO FIGHT BACK AS COMPARED TO MALE ARMY RECRUITER TO CONCLUDE, FEMALE FIGURES HAVE EVERY RIGHT TO EMPLOYED IN ANY FIELD WHEATHER IT IS SEWING MACHINE OR AS A ARMY GENERAL. A SET OF PEOPLE WHO THINKS THIER WOMEN ARE INCAPABLE THEIR ORTHODOX MINDSET SHOULD BE CHANGED BY TEACHING THEM GENDER EQUALITY
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WOMEN
EMPOWERMENT IS A MAJOR REVOLUTION
AS WELL
AS
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WOMEN
HAVE PROVED THEIR CAPABILITY IN
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MANY
FIELDS. IN SEVERAL NATION
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WOMEN
ARE RECRUITING AS A
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ARMY
OFFICER SIMILAR TO
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MEN
AND ACCORDING TO
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SOME
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PEOPLE
THE
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ARMY
WING SHOULD BE
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ONLY
DOMINATED BY
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MEN
. SUCH OPINIONS SHOULD
BE ALTERED
AND PERSECUTE GENDER INEQUALITY TO
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OVERCOM
THIS
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RUDIMENTORY
THINKING.

WOMEN ARE BEING
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SUCCESSFULL
DAY BY DAY AND THEY ARE HAVE PROVEN THAT THEY ARE NOT
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ONLY
EQUAL TO
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MEN
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BUT
THEY ARE SUPERIOR. FEMALES CAN
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BARE
MORE PAIN AS COMPARED TO
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MALES
AND
ALSO
THEY ARE
PHYSICALLY
AND
EMOTIONALLY
MORE STABLE AS COMPARED TO THE MALE. THESE GENRE OF
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SKILLS
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ARE
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MUST
IN BEING AN
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ARMY
OFFICER WHICH
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SHOWS
THAT THEY CAN
ALSO
DO JOB AS A SOLDIER AND CAN BEAT THE
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MALES
IN TERMS OF SOCIAL AND PHYSICAL
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SKILLS
.
FOR INSTANCE
, LAST YEAR
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A A
LADY
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ARMY
OFFICER PERFORMED A PARADE ON
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INDEPENDANCE
DAY AND WHOLE
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AUDIANCE
INCLUDING POLITICAL LEADERS
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APPLAUDE
FOR HER.

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MOREOVER
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SOME
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PEOPLE
COUNTER THAT SOLDIER'S WING SHOULD
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ONLY
BE DOMINATED
BY MALE FIGURES
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ONLY
, IN MY OPINION IT IS GENDER
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INEUALITY
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BECAUSE
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ON THE BASIS ON GENDER WE CANNOT JUDGE ANYONE NOT THEIR
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SKILLS
NOT THEIR CAPABILITY NOTHING. WE SHOULD GIVE
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WOMEN
A CHANCE TO COMBAT WHILE HAVING A WAR I
STRONGLY
BELIEVE THAT
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WOMEN
WILL
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SHOW
GREAT POWER, STRENGTH
AS WELL
AS ABILITY TO FIGHT BACK AS COMPARED TO MALE
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ARMY
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RECRUITER


TO CONCLUDE
, FEMALE FIGURES HAVE EVERY RIGHT TO EMPLOYED IN ANY FIELD
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WHEATHER
IT IS SEWING MACHINE OR AS A
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GENERAL. A SET OF
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WHO
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THINKS
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THIER
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WOMEN
ARE INCAPABLE THEIR ORTHODOX MINDSET SHOULD BE
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CHANGED
BY TEACHING THEM GENDER
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EQUALITY
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IELTS academic IN MANY COUNTRIES, WOMEN JOIN THE ARMY AS MEN DO. HOWEVER, SOME PEOPLE ARHUE THAT ARMY SOLELY NEEDS MEN WHAT IS YOUR OPINION.

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