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It's widely known that each day there are more advertisements on the media that we consume. Charities however follow this trend too. Many people are wondering whether that is a positive or a negative decision by these organizations. To start, we must comprehend that these organizations need the help of the people, since they receive no financing from the governments. In some cases, they are helped by them, but it is not a widely extended phenomenon. Be that as it may, many people and families are depending on them and on the resources they give to the families. For this reason, they can't afford to interrupt the flow of resources that they provide. In consequence, they need to advertise themselves to get more resources for buying clothes or food to subsequently donate. That means two things. The first one, the people are not solidary enough. That's a fact and no one can deny it and that is of course a negative tendency. In general it's a bad situation. Nevertheless, the decision that the charity organizations have done is a proper one. A proper decision fruit of a bad tendency. So I'm completely on their side. But every decision can be analyzed and in this case I'm wondering, how much money did they actually spend for their organization to de advertised. Another question is, of course, whether it is worth given that too much money is spent on this purpose. In summary, I would consider that as a good decision but not a good tendence.
It's
widely
known that each day there are more advertisements on the media that we consume. Charities
however
follow this trend too.

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people
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positive
or a
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decision
by these organizations.

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, we
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comprehend that these organizations need the
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help
of the
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people
, since they receive no financing from the
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governments
. In
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some
cases, they are
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helped
by them,
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but
it is not a
widely
extended phenomenon.

Be that as it may,
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many
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people
and families
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are depending
on them and on the resources they give to the families.
For this reason
, they can't afford to interrupt the flow of resources that they provide. In consequence, they need to advertise themselves to
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get
more resources for buying clothes or food to
subsequently
donate.

That means two things. The
first
one, the
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people
are not
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solidary
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enough
. That's a fact and no one can deny it and
that is
of course
a
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negative
tendency. In
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general it
's a
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bad
situation.

Nevertheless
, the
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decision
that the charity organizations have done is a proper one. A proper
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decision
fruit of a
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bad
tendency.
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So
I'm completely on their side.

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But
every
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decision
can
be analyzed
and
in this case
I'm wondering, how much money did they actually spend for their organization to
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de
advertised. Another question is,
of course
, whether it is worth
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given
that too much money
is spent
on this purpose.

In summary, I would consider that as a
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good
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decision
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IELTS academic Advetising charities on media

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8 paragraphs
254 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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