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he bar graphs give information about percentages of male and female staff who were Teaching in eight different sectors during 2012. Overall, there was a large difference in the numbers of males and females. The most noticable difference come from engineering and education sector, On the hand, Field of medicine have nearly same number of gender rat

he bar graphs give information about percentages of male and female staff who were Teaching in eight different sectors during 2012. Overall, there was a large difference in the numbers of males and females. The most noticable difference come from engineering and education sector, On the hand, Field of medicine have nearly same number of gender rat j9oVa
The bar graphs give information about percentages of male and female staff who were Teaching in eight different sectors during 2012. Overall, there was a large difference in the numbers of males and females. The most noticable difference come from engineering and education sector, On the hand, Field of medicine have nearly same number of gender ratio. In engineering, Male teachers recoreded to be over 80%, while females were comparetively less; women teachers had percentage of below 20. ON the contary, education department had more lady lecturers. . in these secor, females amounted upto 60%, and less than 20% males involved in this sector. futhermore, medicine department had the minmum difference of all; these sector had equal value of 40%, for both genders. Aprt from this, male dominated area of science, buisness, and law. Conversly, Arts, had more female faculties.
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