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Graphs of retail sectors in New Zealand

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The pie graphs present the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in two different year 2003 and 2013. In 2003, travel had been sold for the highest number 36%. The second place was clothes. Film and music was less than clothes for 3%. The least only sales was books. In this year retail sectors had the closer number that in the year 2013. In 2013, the highest and the lowest were film or music and clothes. There were 33% in the most retail parts and 16% in the least retail parts. These sectors different from each other for 17%. The lower than the highest was travel and the third place was books. As the result, people in New Zealand tend to buy more books than in the past because the percentage of books online sales has increased from 2003 to 2013 for 3%.
The pie graphs present the online shopping sales for
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sectors in New Zealand in two
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year 2003 and 2013.

In 2003, travel had
been sold
for the highest number 36%. The second place was clothes. Film and music was less than clothes for 3%. The least
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sales was
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. In this year
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sectors had the closer number that in the year 2013.

In 2013, the highest and the lowest were film or music and clothes. There were 33% in the most
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retail
parts and 16% in the least
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parts. These sectors
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from each other for 17%. The lower than the highest was travel and the third place was
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books
. As the result,
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people
in New Zealand tend to
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more
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books
than in the past
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the percentage of
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online sales has increased from 2003 to 2013 for 3%.
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