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Graph was given for Olympic medals

Graph was given for Olympic medals PMKyj

Given bar-graph illustrates the Olympic medals won by twelve countries. Overall USA was at maximum, won about 2400 medals, whereas China stood last with about 400 medals in total. To start with, gold; Gold medals were majorly won my US, followed by Soviet Union and others, contrastingly, Japan and Australia were at least. Graph is approximatley the same for other nations. Moving next to, Silver medals, again US players brought the maximum silver medals for their nation, Soviet Union, UK, France were behind the each other in the decreasin manner. Bronze medals are least brought by China, Japan, East germany in the respective manner of with some part from 400, 420, 450, whereas Germany, UK, France Soviet Union and USA were at the top repectively. Comparing USA with Soviet Union, the 1st and 2nd runner up, there was a huge gap as USA's total medals was about 1400 more than that of Soviet Union. All other nations are almost relative in Olympic medals.

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medals
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medals
, whereas China stood last with about 400 You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrewardgold
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medals
, again US players brought the maximum silver You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrewardgold
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runner up
, there was a huge gap as USA's total You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrewardgold
medals
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other
 nations are almost relative in Olympic You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrewardgold
medals
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