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Giving money to charity by british

Giving money to charity by british G95jg

The bar chart represents the percentage of British people with different age groups from 1990 and 2000 who are donating their money in charity. It shows at different pace of age they were indulge in the noble cause. Since in 1990, the level of giving was the highest by the individuals between 36 to 50. From this era we depict that in the starting young adults were least intrested towards this charitable work. As they got elder there were more down concern increased of 15%. When crossed the 50 year they were slightky declined in the level of donation from 13% to 20%. In the middle group period they were indulged in the work. In the contrasting year 2010, their percentile of involving in this charity work was increased as they grow towards the maturity phase of life. By elaborating, their funds giving capability started from 7% reach up to 39% (peak in that year). It was the time period of 18 to 65 years. Whilst the people over the age of 65, there was downfall of 12%. Overall, the maximum number people was indulge in the cause belongs to age groupof 35-50 to 51- 65. Whereas, minimum proportion seen in the adulthood of 18 - 25.

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from 1990 and 2000
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between 36 to 50
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 in the work.

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 2010, their percentile of involving in this charity work was increased
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