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Given is pie charts showing the proportion of energy for USA in the years 1980 and 1990.

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Given is pie charts showing the proportion of energy for USA in the years 1980 and 1990. Overall, it is evident that oil and coal was the dominant sources of energy for USA in two years. While the percentage of coal along with nuclear power saw an increase, the opposite was true for natural gas. Commencing with the highest amount of energy sources, as it was already pointed out, oil was the most important source in USA, and it constituted 42% in the chart in 1980. But the amount of it decreased in 1990, at 33%. In addition, natural gas was the next vital source of energy, so the index of it was nearly similar in two years. Turning to the next sources of energy, coal made up a mere 22% in 1980, but it grew to 27% in 1980. Finally, the indices of hydroelectic power along with nuclear power were identical in 1980(5% each). Interestingly, the rate of nuclear power experienced growth in 1990, at 10%.
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in two years. While the percentage of coal along with nuclear
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an increase, the opposite was true for natural gas.

Commencing with the highest amount of
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energy
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, as it was already pointed out, oil was the most
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the amount of it decreased in 1990, at 33%.
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,
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the index of it was
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, coal made up a mere 22% in 1980,
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it grew to 27% in 1980.
Finally
, the indices of
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hydroelectic
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along with nuclear
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were identical in 1980(5% each).
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, the rate of nuclear
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experienced growth in 1990, at 10%.
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IELTS academic Given is pie charts showing the proportion of energy for USA in the years 1980 and 1990.

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