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The two maps below show Paradise island in the past and now.

The two maps below show Paradise island in the past and now. lLQPX
The two maps represent the Paradise island in the past and now. Overall there are multiple choice of alternates nowadays, and old stations are recreated by builders. In the past, only trees were planted, while now instead of trees, there open restaurant, BBQ area and cycle path are created. A few years ago there was scientific research station, whereas now swimming pool is built instead of scientific research station to the north-west of the island. Clearly looking at the map of the past, there were limited Pier and boat. However Pier is expanded and boat is developed in cruise ship. We can see, Hotel complex is changed instead of scientific research station to the south-west of the square. Besides, swimming permitted scenic lookout and Cafe are discovered. So, it can be observed that the Paradise island changed and developed from past to now.
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Paradise island
in the
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past
and
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.
Overall
there are multiple choice of alternates nowadays, and
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old
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stations
are recreated
by builders. In the
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past
,
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only
trees
were planted
, while
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now
instead
of trees, there open restaurant, BBQ area and cycle path
are created
. A few years ago there was scientific research
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station
, whereas
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now
swimming pool
is built
instead
of scientific research
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station
to the north-west of the island.
Clearly
looking at the map of the
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past
, there
were limited
Pier and boat.
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However
Pier
is expanded
and boat
is developed
in cruise ship. We can
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see
, Hotel complex is
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changed
instead
of scientific research
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station
to the south-west of the square.
Besides
, swimming permitted scenic lookout and
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Cafe
are discovered
.
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So
, it can
be observed
that the
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Paradise island
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changed
and developed from
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to
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IELTS academic The two maps below show Paradise island in the past and now.

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