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The graph below show the unemployment rates in the us and japan between march 2005 and march 2011.

The graph below show the unemployment rates in the us and japan between march 2005 and march 2011. rGMJl
The given graph elucidates the unemployment rates in us as well as japan between march 2005 and march 2011. To commence with, in march 2005, it had 2. 5 percentage unemployment rates and after it was follow upwards trend in march 2006 and 2007 percentage was approximately same about 3. 8 percent. After a year, in march 2008 percentage was 4. 4. Moreover in year 2010 it was reached peak point and percentage had 5. 3 and in year 2011 it was slightly fall. In us, 7. 0 percentage was the peak point in year 2005. After upcoming two years it followed downward trend. But in march 2008 and 2009 it was still constant. Further, in 2010 it had least point which is 4. 6 percent. In addition, 2011 it was same in Japan percentage. Overall, end point was same in us and japan and it's both were overlap in last two years.
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as japan between
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2005 and
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2011.

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2005, it had 2. 5
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unemployment rates and after it was follow upwards trend in
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march
2006 and 2007
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was approximately same about 3. 8 percent. After a
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, in
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march
2008
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was 4. 4.
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2010 it
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had 5. 3 and in
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2011 it was
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2005.
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2008 and 2009 it was
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which is 4. 6 percent.
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, 2011 it was same in Japan
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.
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was same in us and japan and it's both
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overlap in last two years.
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IELTS academic The graph below show the unemployment rates in the us and japan between march 2005 and march 2011.

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