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Factors affecting education

Factors affecting education LLQGR

The above chart shows how an adult’s decision to study is affected by different factors and how the cost of education should be shared among all. The first bar graph depicts multiple factors responsible for adult's education. The main reason is their interest in the subject that influence 40% of their decision. Then comes gaining qualifications that rounds about 40% too. Other factors that determine their choice are career that accounts about 22%, followed by improved prospects of promotion, 20% of enjoying studies, 12% to be able to change job and finally, 9% to meet new people. On the other hand pic charts tells how the cost of course should be divided. According to the survey 40% of cost should be paid by the individuals themselves. Rest of the 60% amount should be divided between the employer and taxpayers. Approximately 35% of the total course fee should paid by the employer and 25% of the cost should be beared by the taxpayers.

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