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energy use in australian in 2008

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The pie chart below shows the energy consumed in Australian homes in 2008. There are seven sections of the pie chart related to heating and cooling systems, water heating, and other appliances. . . First, the chart shows us the two parts that take up the most space of the chart, which are the heating and cooling, water haeting. In Australia most people spend a lot of energy on heating and cooling equipment such as heaters or refrigerators. It seems that the weather is quite erratic. Heating and cooling equipment makes up more than a third of the chart. and for heating water, it is only 7% lower, accounting for one-fourth of the energy consumed. Because they don't want to catch a cold because of the harsh weather, the energy consumption is quite high. Next are other appliances, lighting, fridges and freezes which are quite active and necessary things like smart appliances, lighting and refrigerators but because they don't need to consume too much energy, they only take up a small part of the space. house with a small minority and in the range of under one in ten. The rest of the appliances for cooking and stand-by power cost very little with a tiny fraction in the chart because they may often order fast food instead of going to the kitchen and appliances are only used for a short time. In short, in Australia in 2008, the largest amount of energy consumed was in terms of heating and cooling because they were needed and it accounted for as much as the total weight except for water heating. Items that consume less energy may be partly due to the fact that the device has an economical function and does not require much use.
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consumed in Australian homes in 2008. There are seven sections of the pie
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related to
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us the two parts that take up the most space of the
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, which are the
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equipment such as heaters or refrigerators. It seems that the weather is quite erratic.
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consumption is quite high.

Next
are other
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, lighting, fridges and freezes which are quite active and necessary things like smart
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, lighting and refrigerators
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minority and in the range of under one in ten.

The rest of the
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In short, in Australia in 2008, the largest amount of
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consumed was in terms of
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. Items that consume less
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may be partly due to the fact that the device has an economical function and does not require much
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IELTS academic energy use in australian in 2008

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