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employment rate of the families with children in Canada between 1976 and 2014.

employment rate of the families with children in Canada between 1976 and 2014. ORmOE

The two pie charts provide the information about the employment rate of the families with children in Canada between 1976 and 2014. Overall, at the beginning of the period, couples, single earning father dominated the placement status but dual- earner couplers outraced the number at the the end of the period. However, couples with single earner father had the majority with 51% in 1976, it declined drastically to 17% over the 28 year period of time. Couples, no earner rate fell with the difference of 2% in 2014. Even though the dual earners had 33% in 1976, figure rose more than a half of entire population in 2014. Female lone parents doubles the percentage value and there is a increase of 3% in couples single earner mother asa well as male lone parents.

The two pie charts provide the information about the employment rate of the families with children in Canada between 1976 and 2014.

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