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Employment rate by country in 2005 and 2015

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The two bar charts give information about Male’s and Female’s employment rate in Canada, South Korea, and Sweden throughout the years 2005 and 2015. Overall, most of the employee in all countries, and in both years (2005 and 2015) were males. In addition, there was a marked changes in female’s percentage in all countries between 2005 and 2015. South Korea had the highest percentage of male’s employment in 2015; about 75%, while Sweden involved the highest rate of Male employees in 2005; around 80%. Male employment in Canada was increase about 5% in 2015; reaching 70% compared to 2005 which was about 65%. Female’s employment rates were lower than Males in all countries in both years. On the other hand, there was a significant increase in Females employees in 2015 in each country. More than 15% of female’s employment increased in 2015; reaching about 55% compared to about 39% in 2005. Also, there was a marked increase in Female’ rates in 2015 in South Korea and Sweden, reaching (about 35% and 50%) respectively.
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Canada, South Korea, and Sweden throughout the years 2005 and 2015.

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males
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countries
between 2005 and 2015.

South Korea had the highest percentage of male’s
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in 2015; about

75%, while Sweden involved the highest rate of Male employees in 2005; around

80%. Male
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in Canada was increase about 5% in 2015; reaching 70%

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compared
to 2005 which was about
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65%. Female’s
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rates were lower than
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Males
in all countries in both years.

On the other hand
, there was a significant increase in
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Females
employees in 2015

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in
each country. More than 15% of
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increased in 2015;

reaching about 55% compared to about 39% in 2005.
Also
, there was a marked

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increase
in
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rates in 2015 in South Korea and Sweden, reaching (about

35% and 50%)
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