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Download Packages diagram

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As shown in the chart Diagram, there are there Computer packages have been downloaded last five weeks. three colors indicates for the packages, first is the Red then Purple and Blue. the maximum download recorded in the graph is 120 and minimal one is less than 25. Overall, we can see that the most Package Downloads in the whole weeks was ActiveX even through all others. lets make a comparison in the first week. that is clear ActiveX is highest one, then comes java then Net. and if we take a fast look at the chart we notice that this sequence is similar for all week in the graph NET is the least one, Java in the middle and ActiveX is the highest one. the most significant downloaded changes in the chart is NET. let's talk about it. At the first week it hits around 35 but at next week it decrease to mostly 30, then come back to increase again until the fifth week, meanwhile the other two packages was increasing in all weeks.
As shown in the chart Diagram,
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there are there
Computer
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packages
have
been downloaded
last five weeks.

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three
colors indicates for the
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packages
,
first
is the Red then Purple and Blue.
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the
maximum download
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recorded


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in
the graph is 120 and minimal one is less than 25.

Overall
, we can
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see
that the most
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Package
Downloads in the whole
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weeks
was ActiveX even through all

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others
.
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lets
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make
a comparison in the
first
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week
.
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that
is
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clear
ActiveX is
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highest
one, then
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comes


java then Net.
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and
if we take a
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fast
look at the chart we notice that this sequence is similar
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for


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all
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week
in the graph NET is the least one, Java in the middle and ActiveX is the highest one.

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the
most significant downloaded
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changes
in the chart is NET.
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let
's talk about it.

At the
first
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week
it hits around 35
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but
at
next
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week
it
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decrease
to
mostly
30, then
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come
back to increase again

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until
the fifth
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week
, meanwhile the other two
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packages
was increasing in all
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weeks
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