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Division of household tasks: by gender,Great Britain

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This report elaborates on a bar chart which shows the time men and women spend doing diverse house chores during the day. Overall, most men spend their daily house chores doing gardening than any other task and dislike performing washing clothes more than any other task. While women performing cooking and baking task the most, but they don’t prefer odd jobs and Maintenace tasks that much. First of all, both men and women do cooking tasks with the women spending double the amount of time men spend on cooking. Furthermore, observe how women take up to 45 minutes more than men in cleaning. Next, in gardening men take just under a half of the time, while the women take about a fifth of time in gardening and pet care. With the care of children and playing, women far exceed the men in this area by 25 minutes each day, another task to point out is that men undertake maintenance almost three times more than women. Lastly, women dramatically exceed men in clothes washing with the women taking more time than men.
This report elaborates on a bar chart which
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and
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spend doing diverse
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chores during the day.

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spend their daily
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chores
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "going gardening".
doing gardening
than any other
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and dislike performing washing clothes more than any other
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. While
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performing cooking and baking
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the most,
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they don’t prefer odd jobs and
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that much.

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and
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do cooking
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with the
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spending double the amount of
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spend on cooking.
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, observe how
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take up to 45 minutes more than
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in cleaning.
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, in gardening
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take
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under a half of the
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, while the
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take about a fifth of
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in gardening and pet care.

With the care of children and playing,
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women
far exceed the
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in this area by 25 minutes each day, another
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task
to point out is that
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undertake maintenance almost three
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more than
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.
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,
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dramatically
exceed
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in clothes washing with the
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taking more
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than
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.
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IELTS academic Division of household tasks: by gender, Great Britain

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4 paragraphs
181 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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