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Diagram shows chocolates is produced

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The diagram illustrates the information regarding how liquid chocolate is made. Overall, There are main steps in the process, starting with the cacao beans harvesting and ending with liquid chocolate productions. At the first step of the process, the ripe red pods are harvested from cacao trees which are grown in America, Africa, and Indonesia. After that, they cut those pods and are being collected white beans. Next, the newly-fermented beans are covered by the leaves. After that, those beans are spread in sun to dry before they are packed in large sacks of the same size. Then, those packages were transported by trains or lorries for processing. In the factory, these beans have been roasted to dehydrate undergo high degree. Then, newly-poured machines to separate kernel and out shell removed. After that, they are moved to crushing machines which pressed become pow by double roller. Finally, the resulting product is liquid chocolate.

The diagram illustrates the information regarding how liquid chocolate is made
. Overall
, There are main steps in the process, starting with the cacao You use this word too often, consider replacing it withkernelgrainberry
beans
 harvesting and ending with liquid chocolate productions.

At the first
 step of the process, the ripe red pods are harvested
 from cacao trees which are grown
 in America, Africa, and Indonesia. After that, they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :minimize
cut
 those pods and are being collected
 white You use this word too often, consider replacing it withkernelgrainberry
beans
. Next
, the newly
-fermented You use this word too often, consider replacing it withkernelgrainberry
beans
are covered
 by the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :departs
leaves
. After that, those You use this word too often, consider replacing it withkernelgrainberry
beans
are spread
 in sun to dry This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 they are packed
 in large sacks of the same size. Then, those packages were transported
 by trains or lorries for processing. In the factory, these You use this word too often, consider replacing it withkernelgrainberry
beans
 have been roasted
 to dehydrate undergo high degree. Then, newly
-poured machines to separate kernel and out shell removed. After that, they are This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :relocated
moved
 to crushing machines which pressed become pow by double roller. Finally
, the resulting product is liquid chocolate. 

IELTS academic Diagram shows chocolates is produced

Academic

American English

2 paragraphs

153 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 7.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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