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diagram of process manufacturing bricks

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This diagram shows the process of manufacturing bricks which are used for the building industry. The whole process is consisted of mainly six activities and starts from using a digger and ends up to delivering by tracks. As a first activity, the clay which is an original material for bricks is dug by a digger. Secondly, the clay is filtered by a metal grid and a roller below the metal grid carries those small parts of the clay. The sand and water are added to them before a third activity and then the material is shaped by either using a mould or cutting by a wire. The shaped bricks are dried in the oven for 24 to 48 hours as a fourth activity. As a fifth, the bricks are heated at 200 ℃ to 980℃ at first in the kiln and the temperature gets high up to 1300℃. After this, they are cooled in a chamber for 48 to 72 hours. Finally the bricks are packaged and delivered by tracks.
This diagram
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shows
the process of manufacturing
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bricks
which are
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used
for the building industry. The whole process
is consisted
of
mainly
six
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activities
and
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starts
from using a digger and ends up to delivering by
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tracks
.

As a
first
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activity
, the clay which is an original material for
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bricks
is dug
by a digger.
Secondly
, the clay
is filtered
by a metal grid and a roller below the metal grid carries those
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small
parts of the clay. The sand and water are
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added
to them
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before
a third
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activity
and then the material
is shaped
by either using a
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mould
or cutting by a wire. The shaped
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bricks
are dried
in the oven for 24 to 48 hours as a fourth
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activity
. As a fifth, the
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bricks
are heated
at 200 ℃

to 980℃ at
first
in the kiln and the temperature
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gets
high up to 1300℃. After this, they
are cooled
in a chamber for 48 to 72 hours.
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Finally
the
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bricks
are packaged
and delivered by
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tracks
.

IELTS academic diagram of process manufacturing bricks

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2 paragraphs
170 words
6.0
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