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Comparing statistics of local and overseas students

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This is a graphical comparison ranginf from 2001 to 2010 representing the number of overseas and the number of Australian students enrolled in the Australian universities. The x axis here represents the years while the y axis shows the number of students enrolled. When looked at the first graph showing the overseas students, we can see that the numbers have been steadily increasing for all ten years, as compared to that of the second graph, where the statistics seem to be fluctuating. As of the the overseas students, the students commencing can be seen rising from 2001 to 2009 although after 2009, the rise is not very significant. The tolal number of students has been rising throughout. When we look at the graph representing the local students, the number of students commencing had seen an increase from 2001 to 2002. This high rate falls from 2002 to 2007, and is finally seen to increase in 2008, only to slightly fall again from 2008 to 2010. The total number of students enrolled had been rising steadily from 2002 to 2007 but after 2007, it almost stays at the same rate.
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from 2001 to 2010 representing the
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number
of overseas and the
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of Australian
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students
enrolled in the Australian universities.

The
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x axis
here represents the years while the
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y axis
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the
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enrolled. When looked at the
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graph showing the overseas
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, we can
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that the
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have been
steadily
increasing for all ten years, as compared to that of the second graph, where the statistics seem to be fluctuating.

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overseas
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, the
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commencing can be
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rising from 2001 to 2009 although after 2009, the rise is not
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significant. The
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has been rising throughout.

When we look at the graph representing the local
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, the
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commencing had
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an increase from 2001 to 2002. This high rate falls from 2002 to 2007, and is
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to increase in 2008,
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fall again from 2008 to 2010. The total
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after 2007, it almost stays at the same rate.
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IELTS academic Comparing statistics of local and overseas students

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