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The maps illustrate revisions of Clowick Arts centre from 2005 until now. As it's clear, There were a lot of changes in buildings and yard over years. One of the most significant changes is the outside area that was designed over these decades. Plants were grown; Plus, An outdoor exhibition and performance area was placed. The cafe was moved behind the gallery. Now, The drama studio is built between the meeting room1 and cinema. Center hall and cinema were combined but now are separated and moved next to each other in the top right-hand corner of the campus. The galleries were got together; However, Meeting rooms were dissociated. In the past, Toilet was spacious; Whereas, Today it's smaller and was moved behind of concert hall. Thus, We can see that COLWICK ARTS CENTRE is  advanced and fascinated now in comparison to 2005.
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Arts
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centre
from 2005 until 
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. As it's
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clear
, There were
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a lot of
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changes
in buildings and yard over years.

One of the most significant
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changes
is the outside area that
was designed
over these decades. Plants
were grown
; Plus, An outdoor exhibition and performance area
was placed
.

The
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cafe
was
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moved
behind the gallery.
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Now
, The drama studio
is built
between the meeting room1 and cinema.

Center hall and cinema
were combined
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but
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now
are separated
and
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moved
next
to each other in the top right-hand corner of the campus. The galleries were
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got
together;
However
, Meeting rooms
were dissociated
.

In the past, Toilet was spacious; Whereas,
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Today
it's smaller and was
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moved
behind of concert hall.

Thus
, We can
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see
that COLWICK ARTS
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CENTRE
is
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advanced and fascinated
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now
in comparison to 2005.

IELTS academic describing changes in a map

Academic
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6 paragraphs
139 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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