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The bar chart shows the Transport preferences among young peoples from three countries

The bar chart shows the Transport preferences among young peoples from three countries 7WB16
The bar chart provides information about the vehicle list among juvenile people of Four different countries. Overall, Car is the most chosen Transport system while, the bicycle is on the second and Motorcycle is less used transport between all. As the graph shows, Cars is The most of popular way transport in among Three out of four countries. In between, France people use cars roundly 75 %Whereas the figure is roughly halved in Germany. Besides, The Car users in Both Great Britain and USA are leveled with 60 percent. On the other hand, Motorcycle users are identical in Britain and France. Meanwhile, these figures are doubled in the USA comparing to Germany motors vehicle. Regarding Bicycles, half of the total population of Germany used bicycles as their main transport. This stat is approximately 15 percent which is half of Britain's bicycle users in number.
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system while, the
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bicycle
is on the second and Motorcycle is less
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used
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transport
between all. As the graph
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transport
in among Three out of four countries. In between, France
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people
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use
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%Whereas
the figure is roughly halved in Germany.
Besides
, The
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Car
users in Both Great Britain and USA
are leveled
with 60 percent.
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, Motorcycle users are identical in Britain and France. Meanwhile, these figures
are doubled
in the USA comparing to Germany motors vehicle. Regarding
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Bicycles
, half of the total population of Germany
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bicycles
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. This stat is approximately 15 percent which is half of Britain's
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bicycle
users in number.
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IELTS academic The bar chart shows the Transport preferences among young peoples from three countries

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