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describe the provided illustration presents the procedure of manufacturing carbonated drinks.

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The provided illustration presents the procedure of manufacturing carbonated drinks. Overall, there are 5 different stages to process from water to the soda drinks and ultimately to the shelves of the supermarkets and ready to be purchased. According to the given diagram, in the initial stages are merely about to process raw water to drinkable. Firstly, raw water will pass though a filter and flow into a machine with water softener and chemicals to make the raw water drinkable. After the first process, water will follow the pipe and pass though electric heaters to kill all the bacterias. After the all the steps for sterilization, clean water will pass though a cooling pipe and sent to the second stage of carbonation. In this stage water will turn into the base of any kind of soda drinks. Subsequently, the carbonated water will flow through a long pipe to the final stage in a mixing tank before packing and delivery. In the mixing tank, sparkling water will be mixed with certain amount of food colouring, syrup and special flavour, after flavoured the soda, it will run though a filter and fill in to bottles or cans. Finally, the finished projects will be pack into packages and send to various supermarkets.
The provided illustration presents the procedure of manufacturing carbonated drinks.

Overall
, there are 5
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different
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stages
to process from
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water
to the soda drinks and
ultimately
to the shelves of the supermarkets and ready to be
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purchased
.

According to the
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given
diagram, in the initial
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stages
are
merely
about to process raw
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water
to drinkable.
Firstly
, raw
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water
will pass though a filter and flow into a machine with
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water
softener and chemicals to
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make
the raw
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water
drinkable. After the
first
process,
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water
will follow the pipe and pass though electric heaters to kill all the
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bacterias
. After the all the steps for sterilization, clean
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water
will pass though a cooling pipe and
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sent
to the second
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stage
of carbonation. In this
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stage
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water
will turn into the base of any kind of soda drinks.

Subsequently
, the carbonated
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water
will flow through a long pipe to the final
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stage
in a mixing tank
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before
packing and delivery. In the mixing tank, sparkling
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water
will
be mixed
with certain amount of food
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colouring
, syrup and special
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flavour
, after
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flavoured
the soda, it will run though a filter and fill in to bottles or cans.
Finally
, the finished projects will be
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pack
into packages and
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send
to various supermarkets.

IELTS academic describe the provided illustration presents the procedure of manufacturing carbonated drinks.

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208 words
6.0
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