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ln mony countries traditional foods ore being reproced inlernotionol fosf foods. rhis ls hoving o negalive effecf on bolh fomit, ond sociefies. To whol exfenl do you ogree or disogree?

ln mony countries traditional foods ore being reproced inlernotionol fosf foods. rhis ls hoving o negalive effecf on bolh fomit, ond sociefies. To whol exfenl do you ogree or disogree? 3AQWl
ln this era of technology and globalization, all spheres of life have changed dramatically and food is also no exception. lagree that international fast foods and restaurants have eaten up traditional foods and cuisines and this has had a detrimental effect on families and societies. A number of arguments surround my opinion. There are a lot of damaging effects on families. Firstly in this torrid pace of life, people are working till their death. They have no time to prepare and enjoy traditional home cooked food. Ultimately, they switch to an easy option of restaurants. McDonalds have become a ubiquitous term in every home. Secondly, there is the influence of occidental culture over the oriental one. People are forgetting their roots. For example, in earlier times all family members used to sit together and eat, and over the dining table they shared their happenings of the day. These fast foods are eaten alone mostly because they don't appeal to the palate of the older members. As a result, family bonds and relationships are getting blurred. Moreover, the art of home cooking is suffering a lot. There are tangible consequences on society too. Broadly speaking, as people get inclined towards fast food and restaurants, local culture dies out. lt is because traditional food is inextricably linked with culture. Undoubtedly, the identity of the society and nation will disappear. lt will be monopolized by western societies. Also, if people are not healthy, the productivity of the nation will come to a standstill. Last but not least, fast foods promote use-and-throw culture, which adds to the problem of garbage dumps, contamination, pollution and eventually many diseases. To summarise, it can be reiterated that internationalfast foods have carved their niche and traditional food has taken the backseat. Certainly, this has adverse effects on individuals, families and societies.
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this era of technology and globalization, all spheres of life have
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changed
dramatically
and
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food
is
also
no

exception.
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lagree
that international
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fast
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foods
and restaurants have eaten up
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traditional
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foods
and cuisines

and this has had a detrimental effect on
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families
and
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societies
. A number of arguments surround my

opinion.

There are
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a lot of
damaging effects on
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families
.
Firstly
in this torrid pace of life,
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people
are working till their

death. They have no time to prepare and enjoy
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traditional
home cooked
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food
.
Ultimately
, they switch to an

easy option of restaurants.
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McDonalds
have become a ubiquitous term in every home.
Secondly
, there is

the influence of occidental culture over the oriental one.
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People
are forgetting their roots.
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, in

earlier times all
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family
members
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used
to sit together and eat, and over the dining table they shared their

happenings of the day. These
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fast
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foods
are eaten
alone
mostly
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because
they don't appeal to the palate of

the older members.
As a result
,
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family
bonds and relationships are getting blurred.
Moreover
, the art of

home cooking is suffering a lot.

There are tangible consequences on
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society
too.
Broadly
speaking, as
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people
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get
inclined towards
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fast
food

and restaurants, local culture
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dies
out.
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is
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because
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traditional
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food
is
inextricably
linked with culture.

Undoubtedly
, the identity of the
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society
and nation will disappear.
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will
be monopolized
by western

societies.
Also
, if
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people
are not healthy, the productivity of the nation will
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to a standstill. Last
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not least,
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promote
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-and-throw culture, which
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adds
to the problem of garbage dumps,

contamination, pollution and
eventually
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many
diseases.

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summarise
, it can
be reiterated
that
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internationalfast
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foods
have carved their niche and
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food

has taken the backseat.
Certainly
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families
and
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societies
.
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