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Describe the diagram with relevant examples and vocabulary

Describe the diagram with relevant examples and vocabulary Q855X

The diagram provides information about how bread is made for sales in shops on an industrial basis. Overall, it can be seen that there are six main steps of getting ready-made bread. First step is about washing the raw wheat, because it has to be clean for making bread. Next, the raw wheat is undergo the process of grinding in order to become flour. After that, the dough is created by mixing clean flour, water and yeast. The process goes through two machines of mixing. Turning to the remaining three steps, the dough is shaped into bread shapes on the fourth stage. Following this, the bread shaped dough is cooked in the hot oven on the fifth step. After some certain amount of time, the bread is cooked and there is a moment when the next step starts. Last step is where the product is packaged and ready for sale.

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 for sales in shops on an industrial basis. Overall
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steps
 of getting ready-made bread.

First
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step
 is about washing the raw wheat, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 it This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:oughts to
has to
 be clean for making bread. Next
, the raw wheat is Consider using a past participle here: "undergone".undergone
undergo
 the process of grinding in order to become flour. After that, the dough is created
 by mixing clean flour, water and yeast. The process goes through two machines of mixing.

Turning to the remaining three You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstride
steps
, the dough is shaped
 into bread shapes on the fourth stage. Following this, the bread shaped dough is cooked
 in the hot oven on the fifth You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstride
step
. After This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 certain amount of time, the bread is cooked
 and there is a moment when the next
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step
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiates
starts
. Last You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstride
step
 is where the product is packaged
 and ready for sale. 